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Stub is a feature screenplay about identity and memory. It's a mid budget film, and I think the comps are Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind, Inception, Bourne Identity, Before I Go to Sleep. I'd really appreciate some feedback on what works and what could be improved. My main aim here is to improve my screenwriting craft. The log-line is:
'A loyal bodyguard fights to discover the truth about her past trauma, while a shadowy organisation hunts down her employer.'

NOTE: This draft has been revised after the really helpful feedback from Collab readers :)

Thank you!

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