When a freak accident mistakenly kills two office workers before their time, the Powers that Be stick them in the desert and grant them a special dispensation of sixty-nine words before they’re finally and completely dead.

This short script was a finalist for the 2018 Shift Creative Fund but didn't get it and dangit, I wanna know why. I understand that grants are largely crapshoots - but if anyone can spot a way I can improve this thing so I've got a better shot at the next one, I surely would appreciate it.