About this submission
THE GOLDFISH is a proof of concept short film for a feature about Olivia, a transracial adoptee whose pregnancy forces her to confront the unknown-ness of her origin. The story in the short is told from Olivia's point of view.
In my next draft I I think I need to look for ways to bring Olivia's relationship with her sister Sara more to the forefront.
In this moment where Olivia is already a belly’s length away from Sara, this sudden spotlight on Olivia's adopted-ness makes her feel even more estranged. I think it should be this distance, paired with the goldfish-triggered thought that Olivia can’t shake - “What if I don’t want my baby?” - that sends Olivia into an anxious and isolated spiral at the party. Right now I think the exposition and the envelope are a bit clunky but I haven’t figured out an elegant solution. Thanks for checking it out.