About this submission

This is a very early first draft. If you don't have time to read the entire piece, please feel free to leave constructive feedback on whatever amount you are able to read. I wanted to keep the story focused on the characters more than the events of the plot. To keep it tethered to the ways in which their own expectations don't match the realities of their world and how this existential rift can result in a level of alienation. Other than that, I don't want to get too much into the story here, as I don't want to influence anyone's read of the material. Like I said, this is only an initial draft so there are still a lot of parts of the story that may come off as clunky or needing more development, but I would love to hear everyone's opinions about what is working and what may be getting in the way.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read some or all of my work, and I look forward to any feedback you may have.

SS
Stephen Schuyler
Creator
Baltimore, MD, USA
My wife and I are semi-nomadic filmmakers and photographers mostly based out of Baltimore City.

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