About this submission
This is a feature dramedy about a forty-year-old man whose life hasn't turned out the way he planned -- and who gets a chance to see what his "best life" looks like.
I've written 56 pages so far (and an outline), and the attached is the first 24 pages (essentially the first act or set-up of the story). I'm looking for feedback on whether my attempts at comedy work and how the characters play for you.
I'd especially love to hear feedback from Kate Spurgeon if possible given her acting background and comedy experience.