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This project is part of a series I'm developing with the intent to pitch to producers.

It's a work in progress and I am currently on the third draft of the pilot, the premise of this pilot is this: After a tragic accident, the Mendel brothers attempt to give their sister a second chance at life by transferring her consciousness into that of a high functioning AI.

The premise for the first season however is this: When a young girl becomes trapped inside a dying artificial body, she and her brothers go to incredible lengths to give her back a real life.

I want to know what are the things that work and what things don't, I'd like the feedback to focus on what I could do to improve the pilot and make it more interesting.

I want to know if the progression flows nicely, what could be re-written and so forth.

Dilzz
Creator
Santo Domingo, Dominican Republic
My name is Dilia Oviedo, I'm a 33 year old Dominican Artist. I first got my start in the world of art as a child, I participated in many plays as an actress and also behind the scenes in school productions, did ballet and also took part in various art camps through out my childhood. At the age of 9 I got my first photo camera and suddenly it was attached to my hand, I would document anything and everything that captured my attention. As a hobbie I was also a movie lover, my first job at 15 was in a video rental store called "Home Videos", I used to sneak out of school every day to just go there and watch movies, I spent so much time there that they hired me, I loved being able to see movies and getting paid for it was an added bonus. As I got older I felt this huge need to find a creative outlet for some of the ideas that popped into my head, but being from Dominican Republic and not wealthy made it so that certain dreams seemed a bit out of reach, I kept taking pictures and I was known with my friends for my movie nights, as I worked a a rental store I also started collecting DVD's a collection that now holds 450 titles many of which got their start at Sundance. I studied languages and for a brief period lived in Brasil with my then diplomat father, I studied culinary arts and luck blessed me when I got the chance to go to Barcelona to study photography. In 2008 I made my way to Barcelona and there I finally got a chance to express myself through visual art, I created concepts for my shoots, little narratives behind the still frames and slowly I felt myself wanting more, needing more than just still frames. I've experimented with small videos, little moving narratives to go along with my still frames. After I came back to Dominican Republic in 2012 I began teaching and also writing, this need to express myself further led me to take various online screenwriting courses, I also decided to pursue further academic knowledge in regards to film producing from the New York Film Academy in 2017.

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